Improve Work Journal

The piece of writing that I think and want to improve is the written part of my science "Battle of the Beverages" project. I think I could improve this piece by making it more reader friendly, relaxing the mood and tone to attract the reader even more. When I wrote it, I feel that I didnt comunicate very nicely to the reader and maybe set a stressful piece or part in to the influence part of the written part.