Things to Improve in Writing

- Using Transitional Words
- Run on Sentences
- Repeating words through paragraphs
- spelling
- Redundant explanations

Transitional Words

 Transitional words and phrases

- although

- even though

- while

- Where as

- Despite

- In spite of

- however

- on the other hand

- what's more

Grammar

Unknown rules of punctuation and capitalization

Punctuation and Capitalization rules we don't know > grammar

Capitalization:

- You must put capital letter on the title of high rank government officials if their title is put before their name. Do not capitalize the civil title if it's used instead of the name.

Ex: President Obama is running again in 2012.

Punctuation:

- Inside parentheses, periods are only placed inside if the whole sentence is found there.

Ex:  Please read the document. (it is found in attachment A)

- If there is a singular compound noun, possession is shown with 's at the end of the word.

Ex: My mother-in-law's hats.

- You should use the possessive case in front of a gerund.

Ex: Alex's skating was a joy to behold.

Grammar Poster PIc.

Grammar Poster Analysis

Poster Analysis - grammar


My poster
1. Interesting:
Strength: we used different examples and pictures to explain the prepositions.
Weakness: it was missing style, too serious.
Score: 7


Persuasive:
Strength: pictures and quotes. We put winstpn churchill quotes reffering to prepositions.
Weakness: our voices were too damp. Missing emotion
Score: 9


Word choice:
Strength: different examples and complexed words
Weakness: not enough writing
Score 9


Style:
Strength: we tried to make it funny and things with comics
Weakness: not enough enthusiasm
Score8
Total score:


Poster 2


Interesting:
Strength: colorful and many pictures
Weakness: not serious enough


Persuasive:
Strength: cool tricks to not mix up the prepositions(in and on)
Weakness: looked to much like a joke


Word choice:
Strength: comics with complex writing to make it interesting and funny
Weakness: too humorous


Style:
Strength: a fun style to make it fun
Weakness: too silly


Poster 3


Interesting:
Strength: they used photos and emotion
Weakness: lack of info.


Persuasive:
Strength: different pictures and fun examples
Weakness: people may not take it serious enough


Word choice:
Strength: nice diversity of words
Weakness: maybe more words would be good


Style:
Strength: colorful and fun
Weakness: More info would be good






Poster 4


Interesting:
Strength: many graphics and interesting examples
Weakness: lack of information regarding the prepositions


Persuasive:
Strength: makes you look silly if you get it wrong
Weakness: not enough humor


Word choice:
Strength: nice words to show you how to do it and nice tricks
Weakness: more words would be good


Style:
Strength: it is kind of teaching instead of just explaining
Weakness: people may lose interest




Poster 5


Interesting:
Strength: good examples and nice pictures
Weakness: too little text


Persuasive:
Strength: many good examples and added a fun song
Weakness: lack of emotion


Word choice:
Strength: very good vocab to explain the prepositions
Weakness: very little text


Style:
Strength: Colorful and fun
Weakness: not very serious

Grammar Popplet for Poster

http://popplet.com/app/#/108725

Sentences for Prepositions

1. Of.  -A vase of flowers was sitting on the table.
           -She ate a whole bag of candy.

2. About -The book was about the civil war.
              -The column by Andrew was about traffic in Bogota.

3. On.  -The cat was sitting on the computer.
            -The dog was sleeping on the couch.

4. In.    -The plane was about to leave, and Sammy was still in the bathroom.
            -She was hopping to be in D.C. by 10pm.

5. For  -No! That was for Dan, not for you.
            -Im sorry but I cant, Im still doing the paper for english class.

6. To   -They are on their way to the airport.
           -Obama is going to the White House.

7. At   -Were at the new restaurant in times square.
          - Im at grammas house, you?

8. From -They came all the way here from Jersey.
             -The oranges were imported from Florida.

Preposition Game Rules

Grammar game

The game consist of 2 teams each team will have to makes ten questions and theyll give it point depending on the dificulty the maximum is 1000 and the minimum is100 each team will ask one another if you answer right you add the points if you answer wrong you subtract the points (you can have a negative number) at the end the team with the most points will win :) :) :) :) :) 

Preposition Pictures

pictures for prepositions


of: a vase of flowers;http://www.google.com/imgres?q=a+vase+of+flowers&hl=en&biw=1280&bih=699&gbv=2&tbm=isch&tbnid=PRPNKbUNQgIGNM:&imgrefurl=http://
fineartamerica.com/featured/textured-flowers-in-a-vase-nadine-rippelmeyer.html&docid=-4KAlp1RRx2gWM&imgurl=http://images.fineartamerica.com/images-medium
/textured-flowers-in-a-vase-nadine-rippelmeyer.jpg&w=560&h=700&ei=rcixTtzmFsWIgwe-_PicAQ&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=360&vpy=129&dur=69&hovh=251&hovw=201&tx=97&ty=
135&sig=114667162485061291796&page=1&tbnh=151&tbnw=116&start=0&ndsp=21&ved=1t:429,r:1,s:0





about: a story about a prince; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=the+little+prince&num=10&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=1rN9KRl77S5ezM:
&imgrefurl=http://www.amazon.com/Little-Prince-Antoine-Saint-Exup%25C3%25A9ry/dp/0156012197&docid=AtQ4sFtt2Ay4BM&imgurl=http://ecx.images-amazon.com/
images/I/41fsqZc2k9L._BO2,204,203,200_PIsitb-sticker-arrow-click,TopRight,35,-76_AA300_SH20_OU01_.jpg&w=300&h=300&ei=DsmxTueALsipgwfwzaTLAQ&zoom=1&iact=
rc&dur=402&sig=114667162485061291796&sqi=2&page=1&tbnh=148&tbnw=148&start=0&ndsp=21&ved=1t:429,r:0,s:0&tx=57&ty=60



on: cat on computer; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=a+cat+on+a+computer&num=10&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=yqh11F2VFJr3cM:&imgrefurl
=http://www.theage.com.au/ftimages/2007/10/11/1191696063109.html&docid=vcIjuDsOiLQswM&imgurl=http://www.theage.com.au/ffximage/2007/10/11/cat8_gallery__
394x400,0.jpg&w=394&h=400&ei=OcmxTuOEEoWHgwf6xqStAQ&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=448&sig=114667162485061291796&sqi=2&page=1&tbnh=161&tbnw=167&start=0&ndsp=15&ved=
1t:429,r:0,s:0&tx=126&ty=28


in: were in school; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=people+in+school&num=10&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=t6t0PlEfP9isUM:&imgrefurl=http:/
/www.treehugger.com/files/2009/01/shigeru-ban-paper-tube-schools.php&docid=LKm6AuWkJERWSM&imgurl=http://www.treehugger.com/shigeru-ban-paper-tube-schools-
china.jpg&w=468&h=310&ei=0cqxTuTSHszhggfznoGtAQ&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=690&sig=114667162485061291796&sqi=2&page=1&tbnh=134&tbnw=179&start=0&ndsp=17&ved=1t:429
,r:1,s:0&tx=116&ty=56


for: hes running for president; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=presidential+campaign&hl=en&sa=X&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=
isch&tbnid=ALaizi2MinAEhM:&imgrefurl=http://www.motheringhut.com/obama_arenas.html&docid=AagfYC_Qo6yTtM&imgurl=http://www.motheringhut.com
/images/art_obamaarenas.jpg&w=265&h=265&ei=L8uxTpvAD8fTgQf087CkAQ&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=348&sig=114667162485061291796&page=2&tbnh=150&tbnw=150&start=
16&ndsp=18&ved=1t:429,r:1,s:16&tx=122&ty=52



to: hes going to the white house; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=obama+entering+the+white+house&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=cR6pWAZWs
lRtRM:&imgrefurl=http://www.sierraclubgreenhome.com/green-news/the-greenest-white-house/&docid=jTb1IYNyyiYwQM&imgurl=http://www.sierraclubgreenhome.com
/cms/wp-content/uploads/greenestWhiteHouse-344x258.jpg&w=344&h=258&ei=aMuxTv7UKoeYgwfozo3YAQ&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=420&sig=114667162485061291796&page=1&tbnh
=153&tbnw=208&start=0&ndsp=16&ved=1t:429,r:4,s:0&tx=157&ty=102


at: hes at the white house dinner; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=dinner+at+the+white+house&num=10&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=kP_
lIYEuKNPdIM:&imgrefurl=http://www.whitehouse.gov/blog/2009/04/09/a-seder-white-house&docid=k2skEWP-Yfm0fM&imgurl=http://www.whitehouse.gov/assets
/images/seder_blog.jpg&w=525&h=350&ei=3suxTvC5JYmTgwfu4PykAQ&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=546&vpy=176&dur=387&hovh=162&hovw=221&tx=96&ty=89&sig=11466716248
5061291796&sqi=2&page=1&tbnh=160&tbnw=215&start=0&ndsp=15&ved=1t:429,r:2,s:0



from: hes from hawaii; http://www.google.com/imgres?q=obama+in+hawaii&num=10&hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1280&bih=699&tbm=isch&tbnid=ITp52RkxClpKiM
:&imgrefurl=http://whitehouse.gov1.info/blog/blog_post/agenda-hawaii.html&docid=1h1-IcIK_c2W-M&imgurl=http://whitehouse.gov1.info/blog
/blog_post/hawaii-photos/obama_kailua_beach.jpg&w=480&h=320&ei=G8yxTquzBc3pgQff-qjXAQ&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=321&sig=11466716248506129179
6&sqi=2&page=1&tbnh=139&tbnw=185&start=0&ndsp=18&ved=1t:429,r:0,s:0&tx=101&ty=57

Cheat Sheet

Myth Rough Draft2

The Legend of Basketball

Percy Jones is a 14 year old boy who lives in Valencia, California. He is 2 meters tall, brown hair with blue eyes and he lives with his mother. Since his mother is always at work, Percy depends on his best friend, Sam Romy. Sam is a fit, but rather short boy for his age. He is 1.50 meters tall and is captain of the soccer team. They met when they were 6 in elementary school. Percy and Sam both do well at school, but while Sam has no problem with sports, Percy sucks at them. He always liked basketball and he finally got on the team last year.

When this school year started, Percy and Sam immediately tried out for sports. In Sam´s case, he got his place from last year on the soccer team; but in Percy´s case, something happened to him during the summer, and he wasn’t able to regain his spot as defender on the team. Alex, Percy´s arch enemy, won the captain title for the team. Alex has bullied Percy for as long as middle school. Alex is also bullied, but not at school. His parents died when he was 3 years old and he was at a foster home until he was 9. When he was finally adopted, he got foster parents who used him as their maid. He had to clean the house, he had to take out the trash, he made everyone´s bed, and he got them what they wanted at any time. Everyone at school had sympathy because of his parent´s death and the torture that he had now, and Alex takes it out on the weaker kids. Alex bothers Percy by speaking as if not having his dad was awesome. Alex thinks Percy has a father, as everybody else does but the truth was Percy´s father was also dead. He passed away when Percy was 3 years old as well. Percy doesn’t have much to hold on about his father and he really doesn’t remember him, all he has is a “Zeus” Lego figure that his father gave to him when he was 2. Percy treasures this and always has it with him. He feels it protects him, and the truth is it does.

When Percy lost his family, his dad died and he lost his mom to her job; the Greek gods assigned him a guardian. The cache of the deal though, was that Zeus was the guardian. He was the only of the three mayor gods that had never served as a guardian and his two brothers decided that this was the perfect case. Zeus arranged that Percy´s father had gotten the toy for Percy, and especially that it was his action figure. He added a special touch to it so Percy would feel it was part of him, he added his father.

For Sam, the New Year was just going back to school, but for Percy, It was a whole new beginning. He tried to train as much as he could during the summer and tried to smooth out things with Alex. He didn’t really pay any attention to Percy until school. The first day was a living hell for Percy. Alex kept of pushing him to the ground every time they encountered and he kept on telling Percy that he was definitely getting the Captain title. Percy was getting worried that his life hobby being ruined by Alex but then other worries got into place.

Percy´s mother came home that night with bad news for Percy. The factory where she worked was getting shut down. She was now going to get a full time job! Percy wasn’t in the mood to be sad. He was just worried about basketball; after all, he never really see his mom anyway.

When Percy got to school the next day, Alex was waiting at his homeroom. He gave him the game schedule for the trimester, his uniform and a court map. He had an evil grin on his face that scared Percy. He was kind of worried when Alex left; he knew the smile wasn’t a good thing. He didn’t bother to look at his things until his first period. When de did, he noticed he wasn’t set for any of the 9 games except 1!

Percy was furious. He knew he wasn’t playing well but Alex was being a pure bully. The team got to the game very tensely and started losing. Alex was furious and the coach didn’t focus on the game, but of consoling Alex. Percy asked for a chance in the game and it was approved. He got in and started out badly. They took the ball from him 3 times. He was worried and started crying.

Zeus helped Percy with godly powers to get back up on the team and help the match. He ended up scoring 6 points for the team and did very well. It turned out that what Percy needed the most was someone who really paid attention to his troubles and notice that it wasn’t his fault. Zeus had carried that part out. He helped Percy with self esteem and helped him train and gain a positive attitude. Based on his performance, much better than Alex´s, the coach put him as team captain. Zeus also got Percy´s mother a better job that was only half time and paid a little more than the other one did. She ended up having lots of time for Percy and they lived happily ever after.

Myth Rough Draft1

The Legend of Basketball

Percy Jones is a 14 year old boy that lives in Valencia, California. He is 2 meters tall, brown hair with blue eyes and he lives with his mother. Since his mother is always at work, Percy depends on his best friend, Sam Romy. Sam is a fit, but rather short boy for his age. He is 1.50 meters tall and is captain of the soccer team. They met when they were 6 in elementary school. Percy and Sam both do well at school, but while Sam has no problem with sports, Percy sucks at them. He always liked basketball and he finally got into the team last year.

When this school year started, Percy and Sam immediately tried out for sports. In Sam´s case, he got his place from last year on the soccer team; but in Percy´s case, something happened to him during the summer, and he wasn’t able to regain his spot as defender on the team. Alex, Percy´s arch enemy, won the captain title for the team. Alex has bullied Percy for as long as middle school. Alex is also bullied, but not at school. His parents died when he was 3 years old and he was at a foster home until he was 9. When he was finally adopted, he got foster parents that used him as their maid. He had to clean the house, he had to take out the trash, he made everyone´s bed, and he got them what they wanted at any time. Everyone at school had sympathy because of his parent´s death and the torture that he had now, and Alex takes it out on the weaker kids. Alex bothers Percy by speaking as if not having his dad was awesome. Alex thinks Percy has a father, as everybody else does but the truth was, Percy´s father was also dead. He passed away when Percy was 3 years old as well. Percy doesn’t have much to hold on about his father and he really doesn’t remember him, all he has is a “zeus” lego figure that his father gave to him when he was 2. Percy treasures this and always has it with him. He feels it protects him, and the truth is, it does.

When Percy lost his family, the Greek gods assigned him a guardian. The cache of the deal though, was that Zeus was the guardian. He was the only of the three mayor gods that had never served as a guardian and his two brothers decided that this was the perfect case. Zeus arranged that Percy´s father had gotten the toy for Percy and specially that it was his action figure. He added a special touch to it so Percy would feel it was part of him, he added his father.

For Sam, the new year was just going back to school, but for percy, It was a whole new beginning. He tried to train as much as he could during the summer and tried to smooth out things with Alex. He didn’t really pay any attention to Percy until school. The first day was a living hell for Percy. Alex kept of pushing him to the ground every time they encountered and he kept on telling percy that he was definitely getting the Captain title. Percy was getting worried that his life hobby being ruined by Alex but then other worries got into place.

Zeus helped Percy with godly powers to get back up on the team and help the match. He ended up scoring 6 points for the team and did very well. It turned out that what Percy needed the most was someone that really paid attention to his troubles and notice that it wasn’t his fault. Zeus had carried that part out. He helped percy with self esteem and helped him train and gain a positive attitude. Based on his performance, much better than Alex´s, the coach put him as team captain. Zeus also got Percy a better job that was only half time and paid a little more than the other one did. She ended up having lots of time for percy and they lived happily ever after.

Myth Final

The Legend of Basketball

Percy Jones is a 14 year old boy who lives in Valencia, California. He is 2 meters tall, brown hair with blue eyes and he lives with his mother. Since his mother is always at work, Percy depends on his best friend, Sam Romy. Sam is a fit, but rather short boy for his age. He is 1.50 meters tall and is captain of the soccer team. They met when they were 6 in elementary school. Percy and Sam both do well at school, but while Sam has no problem with sports, Percy sucks at them. He always liked basketball and he finally got on the team last year.

When this school year started, Percy and Sam immediately tried out for sports. In Sam´s case, he got his place from last year on the soccer team; but in Percy´s case, something happened to him during the summer, and he wasn’t able to regain his spot as defender on the team. Alex, Percy´s arch enemy, won the captain title for the team. Alex has bullied Percy for as long as middle school. Alex is also bullied, but not at school. His parents died when he was 3 years old and he was at a foster home until he was 9. When he was finally adopted, he got foster parents who used him as their maid. He had to clean the house, he had to take out the trash, he made everyone´s bed, and he got them what they wanted at any time. Everyone at school had sympathy because of his parent´s death and the torture that he had now, and Alex takes it out on the weaker kids. Alex bothers Percy by speaking as if not having his dad was awesome. Alex thinks Percy has a father, as everybody else does but the truth was Percy´s father was also dead. He passed away when Percy was 3 years old as well. Percy doesn’t have much to hold on about his father and he really doesn’t remember him, all he has is a “Zeus” Lego figure that his father gave to him when he was 2. Percy treasures this and always has it with him. He feels it protects him, and the truth is it does.

When Percy lost his family, his dad died and he lost his mom to her job; the Greek gods assigned him a guardian. The cache of the deal though, was that Zeus was the guardian. He was the only of the three mayor gods that had never served as a guardian and his two brothers decided that this was the perfect case. Zeus arranged that Percy´s father had gotten the toy for Percy, and especially that it was his action figure. He added a special touch to it so Percy would feel it was part of him, he added his father.

For Sam, the New Year was just going back to school, but for Percy, It was a whole new beginning. He tried to train as much as he could during the summer and tried to smooth out things with Alex. He didn’t really pay any attention to Percy until school. The first day was a living hell for Percy. Alex kept of pushing him to the ground every time they encountered and he kept on telling Percy that he was definitely getting the Captain title. Percy was getting worried that his life hobby being ruined by Alex but then other worries got into place.

Percy´s mother came home that night with bad news for Percy. The factory where she worked was getting shut down. She was now going to get a full time job! Percy wasn’t in the mood to be sad. He was just worried about basketball; after all, he never really see his mom anyway.

When Percy got to school the next day, Alex was waiting at his homeroom. He gave him the game schedule for the trimester, his uniform and a court map. He had an evil grin on his face that scared Percy. He was kind of worried when Alex left; he knew the smile wasn’t a good thing. He didn’t bother to look at his things until his first period. When de did, he noticed he wasn’t set for any of the 9 games except 1!

Percy was furious. He knew he wasn’t playing well but Alex was being a pure bully. The team got to the game very tensely and started losing. Alex was furious and the coach didn’t focus on the game, but of consoling Alex. Percy asked for a chance in the game and it was approved. He got in and started out badly. They took the ball from him 3 times. He was worried and started crying.

Zeus helped Percy with godly powers to get back up on the team and help the match. He ended up scoring 6 points for the team and did very well. It turned out that what Percy needed the most was someone who really paid attention to his troubles and notice that it wasn’t his fault. Zeus had carried that part out. He helped Percy with self esteem and helped him train and gain a positive attitude. Based on his performance, much better than Alex´s, the coach put him as team captain. Zeus also got Percy´s mother a better job that was only half time and paid a little more than the other one did. She ended up having lots of time for Percy and they lived happily ever after.

Grammar Test Reviews

Run On Sentences:

I learned that when there are two independent clauses, they can be united bya semi colon and sometimes by a comma. Also, that some run on sentences can be fixed by conjunctions.


Wich, That and Who

I learned that in some sentences, which and that are both correct, but there is a preffered one. This happens when the clause is introduced by a relative pronoun makes it restrictive.

Types of Sentences

I learned that complex-compound sentences are more than one independent clause, and at least one dependent clause, but they can have more than 1 dependent clause.

Who - That - Which - Run on Sentences - Complex Compound Sentences

Who: It is used to refer to a person that did someting: The person WHO stole the candy.

Run On: a run on sentence is a sentence that has two indipendent clauses, that are united incorrectly.

which: refers to a person that would do something

That: refering to something somebody would like or wishes or something in prural

Comples Compound Sentence: a sentence with two independent caluses joinde by a coordinator