Mathias: tomas did a very good job. He really did show
his interest in the project and organized it very well. I like how he put very
straight facts into his writing and helps to shape your opinion as the reader.
If I were to correct this, I would only check spelling, the structure is great
how it is.
William: I really liked reading this. Now I know how
energy drinks can be to your body. My correction is to make it more friendly.
Relax the mood.
Tomas´ Dad: I really enjoyed reading Tomas´s work. I
personally think energy drinks are horrible in every way, so I wouldn’t say
anything good about them. The correction I have for Tomas is to be more clear.
There were times were you just jumped into an explanation of something you
didn’t know was being covered. That’s what I would correct.
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